As the sun rose, the party started to wind down. Sleeping bags were pulled out, couches were claimed. Exhaused, wasted people passing out on every comfy surface. I staggered into the livingroom, the walls swaying slightly on either side of me. Thrust my half drunk glass of whiskey and something at a table and aimed myself for the mattress in the middle of the floor. My sleepingbag was nearby, and I unzipped it, pulling it over me, eyes already closed. There was guys passing out on the couch and 3 differant chairs around the room, and I heard my best friend, Rich, ask if the other half of the mattress was taken. I grunted and wriggled over slightly. He yanked off his trousers, shirt and socks and collapsed next to me, pulling half the sleeping bag over himself. He wriggled closer, so we could both fit under... suddenly, the bare skin of his chest lay against my back. He stopped moving, as if he'd passed out, and I lay there, keeping still, pretending to be asleep. But I was drunk, and suddenly horney. Somehow, I couldn't get the thought of Rich's cock out of my mind. I wondered what it would be like. Pretending to stir in my sleep, I wriggled my bum back into Rich's groin. Occasionaly wriggling against him or pushing back, as if I were just sleeping badly, I attempted to touch his cock, to give him a hard-on. After a while of this, I felt something push gently against my bum! I could feel his cock stirring slightly, pushing against me through both our boxers! My heart was racing and I felt giddy, carried away on a sexual wave. I kept my best impression of being unconcious, lying to still then occasionally pushing against his cock. Every time, I felt his erection grow slightly. Then, when it was pressing hard and hot against me, Rich moved his groin back slightly, to give his cock room to move. It sprung upward, and he thrust forward, nuzzling it between my arse cheeks. Now I knew he was awake, and as aroused as I was. I moved against him again. The room grew quiter, everyone was still, deep breaths and snores the only sound. After a long silence and darkness during which his cock pressed against me, I finally gained the courage. I've never wanted to date a man, but in my fantasies I'd wondered what it would be like to fuck a man, and now those fantasies were all I could think of. I rolled over, a few inches between us. I could feel his breath on my face. Hesitantly and unbelievably nervous, I reached up a hand and placed it gently on his chest. Then I moved it down, only my fingertips and nails touching his skin, so gently caressing and scratching. Going slower and slower as I neared the top of his boxers, waiting to see if he was going to stop me. My fingers touched the waistband of his boxers. I slid them on top of his boxers. Down I crept. Then, I touched him. My fingers slid onto the fabric covering his cock. I could feel the heat from his flesh, could feel how hard he was, straining against the fabric. I stroked my light caress down, across the bottom of his helmet and down his shaft, then back up. He groaned quietly, and twitched beneath my touch. I kept doing this, up and down and all over his cock, exploring, slow and only just touching, until I slid up to move over the top of his cock and his boxers were wet. I stroked the spot of precum, then couldn't stand it anymore, and slipped my hands inside his boxers, pulling them out over his cock and down. He wriggled his hips to help me. I slid them all the way down his legs, bending forwards to pull them off his feet. He lay in front of me, totally naked, as I pushed the sleeping bag off. I looked around to check everyone was asleep. I was so nervous someone was going to wake up, but at the same time, the thrill of it was a hot twist burning in my gut and my cock and my balls, driving me to do more. I wrapped one hand gently around his cock, the lightest pressure. He was as hard as he could get, his cock long and thick in my hand, soft flesh totally rigid and sticking out from his stomach at a slight angle. I moved one finger up to the very tip, feeling him dripping with precum. I slide through it, and rub gently where the tip of his purple head is exposed, the foreskin pulled back by his erection. He gasps, and twitches in my hand again, then draws a deep breath as I slowly pull the foreskin down, slick with precum, leaving the deep purple head glistening. It's beautiful. I stroke his shaft, slowly, slowly getting faster, gripping him tighter. He is moaning low and quiet. I bring my other hand up and fondle his balls, rubbing them softly in my hand. My face is getting closer and closer to his cock, until I stop everything and blow a hot breath upon his untouched helmet. I snake my tongue out and lap across the top of his helmet, shivering in pleasure as I hear him groan. I pull my tongue back, loving the taste of his moisture in my mouth, then take the whole head of his cock in my mouth, sucking and stroking with my tongue, as my hands resume stroking his shaft and balls. I bob slowly up and down with my mouth, then push down, taking him into my throat. I get it a short way in, and push slowly up and down, holding him tight within my swalling throat. I grasp him tightly and wank faster, then manage to open my throat further, taking him deep down. I feel his orgasm rise as he pushes into me, and as the first spurt shoots from him, I swallow, sucking it straight down my throat. As I swallow, my throat muscles grip and stroke him tightly, and he thrusts further, pushing into the back of my throat and moaning louder. His cock seems to swell even bigger, and he erupts into my stomach thrusting and groaning for what seems like forever. As he slows and I need to breath, I push him slowly away, pulling him out of me. He slowly falls limp, panting, breathing slowing... He seems lost for words, but the look of amazement and satisfaction in his eyes says everything. I passionately kiss his cock once, slowly, before rolling over and closing my eyes, leaving him naked and snuggled against me.

The End.



Feedback appreciated, thanks. Hope you enjoyed

 

Ohhhh god thank you so much sweetheart. I am sooooooo horny that was fabulous.

 

very readable,thank you i will look for more of your stories

 

Made me rock hard! keep them coming!

 

Room

Is there room for 3 in that sleeping bag?

 

Hooooly shit!

First I would've loved to have read the story, but I looked at it and my eyes started to bleed. Grammer, spelling, and have you heard of paragraphs?

Okay, I'll be constructive now, please consult an editor and make it write (get it?)

And for the other muppets, jeeze what schools did you guys go to??

 

If you'd bother to read it you'd see that his spelling's fine. I didn't notice one mistake when I read it, and I notice mistakes easily. Go on, point one out.

And you're right, there isn't really paragraphs, but it's still perfectly easy to read. Maybe you need your eyes tested if they really couldn't cope with a small block of writing without "bleeding".

I'm pretty sure his grammar [[which, if you'll look closely at your own post, you'll see that you spelt incorrectly. Don't have a go about people's spelling and then fuck up your own.]] is fine. I didn't see anything wrong with it, and like I said, I notice mistakes in writing easily.

You should probably have actually read it before you made such a stupid unjustified comment.

And as for everyone else, they obviously just have a little more patience and aren't quite as quick to judge a story just because it doesn't have any paragraphs.

Now, either point out all these apparent mistakes, or apologise for being a dick.

Pixie x

 

thank fuck it was'nt the school you went to, ignorant bastard

 

your wrong as far as i am concerned i don't have patience with ignorant pricks like him, i have looked at his profile, and guess what he has no friends (surprise surprise)

 

Thank you soooo much there is nothing hotter than gay sex.

 

~cut~

 

I welcome criticism, but when you mix it with pointless insults it's unlikely anyone's ever going to listen to you, so the only harm you're doing is to yourself. Yes, there were probably a few spelling mistakes, I didn't put as much effort as I could've into this (although all your posts have been full of mistakes ) and I do struggle with paragraph placement, although I'm not oblivious to them but, well, do you have any suggestions for where paragraphs could go? I find it particularly hard with something like this where it's all one scene, there don't seem to be any natural breaks.

Oh and if you really wanna get personal and insult my schooling, I'm most likely better at English than you, and was always by far the best in my class in English, including through 3 years of A level, so....

Oh and lol, it's spelt grammar.... fail.

Thanks

 

I'm pretty sure there isn't any mistakes, I checked =P x

 

who cares

I read stories to masturbate too, not to read perfect prose. I hate the grammar police.

 

I care it annoys me when people can't be bothered to get it right, and mistakes distract me from the important bits, but thanks anyway
Oh and... I AM THE GRAMMAR POLICE! Mwah ahaha

 

Hello officer. lol

 

1: I admit, I came off a bit too harsh. I wouldn’t know about the spelling, because I refuse to read big bulky paragraphs like that.

2: The comment was not stupid or unjustified, in fact I copy & pasted the chapter to my editor, and he went into screaming monkeys phase. What I wrote was polite by his standard.

3: Tell me off fine, but don’t tell me off for ‘insulting’ his writing and then insult me, as far as I’m concerned this is childish and school ground tactics that will only serve to upset.

4: His grammar is not fine, as for misspelling the word grammar *shrugs* one spelling mistake, bite me. How can you not see any mistakes in it, sure his spelling is probably fine but the whole thing is a mess.

5: No they just don’t know what a ‘well written story’ is, his is not, it’s a good try, I admit that.

“First I would've loved to have read the story, but I looked at it and my eyes started to bleed. Grammer, spelling, and have you heard of paragraphs?”

There is no swearing in this sentence, and yeah, I admit maybe I shouldn’t have said it made my eyes bleed. But I will not apologise for putting forward criticism, I’ve had, far, far worse than that, as has my own editor who writes phenomenal stories that I could never hope to compete with.

Frankly if you can’t handle the abuse, don’t write. If so, say, okay then WHAT is wrong with it and HOW do I fix it, and then, I would quite happily explain.

LOL I find that comment amusing more than insulting, ignorant indeed, and if we’re picking on MY spelling within posts, perhaps y’all need to get off your freaking high horses and check your own spelling.

1: I’m not an ignorant prick.

2: I have no friends ON THIS SITE, because I do not frequent here often, I am a writer on Storiesonline.net and have many, many reviews.

I’m surprised, your British like me, I pity our country, mind you, saying that, most of the population consists of people like yourself who rather than using diplomacy and tact, prefer to swear at others and call them ignorant pricks.

LOL fair enough cat’ I salute you.

Good!

You enjoy writing and you want to perfect it. I wasn’t going to post my stuff on here, because, as I say, I don’t come here often enough to care. But I may do just that, to show these ‘fuckers’ that I’m not an ignorant prick.

If you’re interested we can talk more through IM, I’m willing to send you a link of my stories so you can ‘verbally abuse’ me as well Give and take man, give and take.

Once again, I will not apologise for my post, as I believe and still do that I was right, I do admit for coming on to strong and in the future will try and tone it down, but I am passionate about my writing and like to perfect it. When I see silly mistakes I get angry and stomp my keyboard.

Anonomus I wish you the best of luck, the rest of you, bite my shiny metal ass.

---Darkest Knight.

 

Hmmm funny that, now that I've defended myself, guess I'm not such an arrogant prick after all huh?

 

I could actually carry on arguing with you, but drawn out arguments over the internet? No thanks. I've made my point, no sense in carrying it on.

 

Fair enough, as I said, we're all adults here